Thursday, April 29, 2010

Thursday Poet's Rally week 16 ::Empty Cradle Rocking In time::

Here's my entry to Jingle's Thursday Poet's Rally week 16. Any one can join the rally. All you need to do is leave a comment in Jingle's  Blog... :)

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Empty cradle rocking in Time



Slowly she smoothens his dusty clothes,
arranging them in the wooden stand,
along with teddy bears and plastic cars,
never will sparkle his electric wand.

Muted sighs had dried the tears,
her numb world no longer lament,
dragging each day, faking a smile,
trying to frame dispersed moments.

Chaos had suddenly darkened that day,
heavily she paid for their crime,
now grimly watches her forlorn eyes,
Empty cradle rocking in time.




**Written for a another challenge - Karan, a fellow Poet, had tagged me to write about a mother who had lost her only son in a bomb blast.

Image source - Google




28 comments:

  1. Extremely sad! But such strong evoked feelings. Nicely done!

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  2. beautiful..! evokes ..strong emotions ... very nice !

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  3. I love the picture with the poem. It completes the story!

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  4. oh i feel the heaviness of the empty cradle...wonderfully sad.

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  5. Sad one, but you have expressed the lines beautifully. My first time here and glad to see you visiting my blog..

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  6. I agree with Brian...sense heavy. sad. emptiness.

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  7. awww..you used the phrase very good..the story within your poem is so sad..

    nice work :)

    (ps. check out my latest post if you have time,,.thanks :3)

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  8. very nicely done..
    with such sorrow...
    but so wonderfully written.
    wonderful poem!

    My dear Raj,

    Tara started a new game and I am TAGGING YOU.. please go to Wordy Wednesday @Tara Miller Writes to write the next 1-3 lines to a story yet told! Once you have done that, please TAG others too. Happy Thursday. hugs shakira

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  9. Wow, such moving words. Invokes a sadness I can't even imagine. Wonderful poem xx

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  10. That's pretty powerful stuff. Well handled.

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  11. This gave me goosebumps. The tragedy conveyed so well!

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  12. ossum princes...
    ekdum dhinchak and dhaassuuu poem..
    sad thaa but the feelings have come out super swell
    i wonder how you manage to do it so well :)

    aawards time :D
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  13. @Michele
    @William
    thank you so much :D
    Glad you liked it :)

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  14. @Jingle
    thanks a lot :D
    its because of you that I have started writing so much :)

    @Viddhi
    thanks a lot and welcome to my blog :)

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  15. @Lynn
    I actually searched a lot for a proper picture...
    thankfully its complemented well :)
    thanks a lot for visting by :)

    @Brian
    thank you so much Brian :)

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  16. @Vidya
    thanks a lot for visiting :)
    welcome to my blog :)

    @magiceye
    thanks a lot :D

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  17. @ayu
    thank you so much for the wonderful words :)

    will check yours too :)


    @Shakira
    thanks a lot :D
    glad you liked it :)
    will check out the link :)

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  18. @bryliejane
    thank you so much for the encouraging words :)
    welcome to my blog :)

    @mudwords
    @republicofchic
    thank you so much :)

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  19. @Megz
    thank you thank you
    :D
    and thanks for correcting the mistakes too :D
    awww awards :D coollll :D
    will accept it :D
    thanks again :)

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  20. @Chocolate love
    thanks a lot :D

    @sankoobaba
    thank you so much :)

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  22. Very well written poem, I enjoyed it!
    I love you blog, simply beautiful :)

    marinela x x

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  23. its truly painful and sad. very wonderfully written.

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