Thursday, March 24, 2011

::A Song of Eternal Wait::



Across the wild velvet moor, when delicate bluebells yawn
near crystal rill, a belle sings, on each bright summer morn.

humming songs of eternal wait,crouched on gravel brown
painting memories of yesters,long after sundown,

though several summers have passed ,since the day of his no-return,
still ‘neath flickering promises, lingers lullabies of nocturne.

Swept by time, one fateful day,a stony silence ensued
there fell the last solitary tear, of love, hurt, and an adieu.

but they say, across the moor,when delicate bluebells yawn,
still echoes a mellifluous song, on each bright summer morn.

32 comments:

  1. Such a poignant summery thoughts Rah...:(

    i love the bluebells, the humming songs and the lullabies of nocturne and that wild velvet moor...

    but the happiness suddenly got a halt..life is like that and we still wait for a new dawn, hopeful!

    Beautiful....

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  2. your words project lovely sounds,
    beautiful entry,

    Happy Rally.

    x

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  3. beautiful poetry.. but as a suggestion, you could have put a better picture !!

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  4. Summery and hopeful, beautiful words! And I like the picture too ...Happy writings!

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  5. meri tragedy queen ne koi horror movie dekh li kyaa :P :P :P :P
    massttt aaya poem :D i jus loved the blue bells line.. kittaaaa cute lagta hai sunne n padhne mein :D

    awesome imagery as always :D

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  6. This is one of my favorites of the rally, this week.

    Just lovely, Rajlakshmi.

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  7. Breathtaking! Beautiful sadness... It's like a song indeed... A song about longing. Ahh just love it! ;)

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  8. Wow.
    A beautiful poem. It remindedly quite strongly of the great poets of old. A great read.
    The Lonely Recluse.

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  9. Something that touches the inner being does not fade away, it just rests a while! Good write!

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  10. that was a fantastic poem dear, the imagery was superb xxx

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  11. When I think of poetry it is this that comes to mind.... lovely ;D

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  12. When I started reading, I was thinking that this again was one among those standard eternal wait poem. But I had to change my opinion as I read through your poem line by line :) . I liked it very much, especially the ending part of it :)

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  13. what a lovely poem! it has an agelessness to it that is just delightful!

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  14. Wonderful flow.I remember once you have written something abt cascade flow..is this the same pattern?

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  15. Heathcliff and Cathy ?
    Lovely poem.

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  16. long lines with a beautiful rhyme.. well thought and well versed, Raji :)

    Here's My Poetry For The Rally

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  17. how is your day?

    please find time visiting poets who were here for you but you did not visit yet..

    Thanks..

    have fun. :)

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  18. Enchanting song that your poetry sings.

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  19. truly enjoyable, felt like singing a long, great flow !
    Happy Rally
    JL&B

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  20. what a poem. splendid poem raj, loved it.

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  21. oh god this is amazing! i love it!

    please check my rally entry too:
    " Perfect "

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  22. Hi Rajlakshmi, lovely poem you have. Describing hope, acceptance yet still hoping. I think that's why I like spring - it brings hope and it signifies the start of a new year :)

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  23. DidItellyouthatyourrhymingpatternisawesomazaing?
    (:
    Happy Rally!

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  24. What intense imagery! Love, wait, yearn... the way you expressed is just fabulous. Overall a mind blowing read!

    I love your blog template.. :)

    Hugs xx

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  25. Thanks for sharing..

    perfect poetry.
    A++

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  26. There is nothing that time cannot sweep...lovely poem Rajlakshmi:)

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  27. I really loved the imagery in this poem. And emotions of the old story of the woman waiting for her man forever brought out really beautifully.

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  28. Can feel the wait...and the music of the emotions!!!!

    enjoyed ur poem :-)

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  29. when delicate bluebells yawn,

    a delightful turn of phrase. I love this...so charming, yet poignant. Hugs, pathttp://patcegan.wordpress.com/2012/08/20/i-am-my-choices/

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  30. Lovely Lines.. Beautifully written... :)

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