Friday, May 20, 2011

::A dream beyond time::




Promises in colorful chime,
Splashed across the peach horizon,
strung by strands of my golden sun,

sweet nothings and verses to rhyme,
till stars shrink down in space yonder,
blend of illusion still wander.

Will these moments last beyond time?
beneath summery midnight blue,
a journey smooth, hiccups but few.


I tried writing a Constanza, but couldn't go beyond three para's :( Writer's block hit at the wrong time

17 comments:

  1. neveer tried writing a constanza before. I'll have to try it. love the photo and the poem.

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  2. Beautiful words conveying hope and happiness....

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  3. Never tried writing a constanza before - thanks for teaching nice poem

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  4. "hiccups but few"...may it stay that way!

    enjoy the rally!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/20/the-spirit-of-the-sand-boa/

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  5. Another new form :) Lovely, I just love your forms now, but missing your shape poetry, which was quite regular for rallies..! Any on the cards?

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  6. lets keep our fingers crossed. :)

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  7. love this,

    you make me smile.
    awesome job.

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  8. May it be eternal now that your words have immortalised it.Lovely flow of rhymes.

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  9. thanks for teaching me this new form.. love this.. Here is my rally post, ~ come on idiot, you are for me ~

    ! Happy Sunday !

    Someone is Special

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  10. Sweet and Innocent! Love is special always

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  11. So bad the writers block hit you.. could have enjoyed more of those simple verse.
    BTW Thank you for the support.

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  12. the last stanza is magical.
    overall, love your humor and playfulness.

    beautiful entry.

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  13. the last stanza is magical.
    overall, love your humor and playfulness.

    beautiful entry.

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  14. lovely flow. a good description of young love and happiness.

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  15. Ha, it's like you were reading my mind. The entire form i was trying to figure out what form this was. I've seen it, but couldn't put my finger on it. Don't worry about the length. Forms are forms for guidance, to provide structure. Some forms are stricter than others. You did a wonderful job, eliciting a moment. Eloquence in brevity. Thanks for sharing.

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