Friday, May 27, 2011

When Time frowns




Silver rime
on moments, once sublime
flickering across purple twilight,

Stale promises piled ‘neath a melancholic night.
faceless voices rejoicing an eclipsed moon’s plight

in solitude, a distant dawn drowns
life drapes an old hag’s gown,
when time frowns.

The Trois-par-Huit was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.

Trois-par-Huit (Three-by-Eight or Octa-Tri for short), a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3 and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3. The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes the meaning of the poem.  *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned.


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7 comments:

  1. It is very well written. Thanks for explanation.

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  2. very lovely imagery.



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  3. Lovely imagery.
    I like the ending "when time frowns".

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  4. Elegant and wonderful imagery. There is this unnameable feeling I get when seeing an eclipse something like awe and anxiety you really captured that feeling

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  5. fabulous poem raj. thanks for teaching the style. will try this one, i wonder if i will be able to write a beautiful poem like this.

    its gorgeous

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