Thursday, October 6, 2011

::The Last Year::



Tiny circles of silver ashes, 
decked her wings , 
as she orbed around 
trampled remnants,

smoke filled milieu, 
beckoned her,
among eerie copper leaves, 
-Fluttering-
desperately she searched 
for her summer bloom, 
with lively purple petals. 

awaiting her arrival,
soaked in lonely moonlit sighs,
S L O W L Y
it faded into the dark.

Image clicked in a garden

15 comments:

  1. This is a poem that can't be read quickly. The reader needs to savor each line, like looking at a ahndful of photographs. The total story presented is very vivid and sadly clear. Though... beautiful somehow, too. Excellent write!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/

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  2. Poetic...Relish each word of it and picture is nice...

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  3. Mm, the return to the (unstated) silver of moonlight is appealing, making the poem into a nice circle, just as the shape of the stanzas dow.

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  4. you give the flowers life and emotions.

    elegant imagery.

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  5. love your choice of words my friend.. and tq for coming by..

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  6. Hello.
    This poem is beautiful.
    Great shot of the flowers.

    Thanks for sharing & visiting my blog.

    Yesterday With You

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  7. Beautifully written, lovely imagery and the photo complements your poem :)

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  8. boooottiiiphullll raaajjiiiii :D mastttt likhi :D lekin pehle hi padh chuki :D :D

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  9. Great ending!

    Here is my entry:
    http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html

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  10. What a remarkable poem each line so well done and the images are so vivid you need to really look at savor each line as you read this
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/

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  11. magical poem raj, simply magical. the picture it painted in front of eyes is beautiful.

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  12. as she orbed around
    trampled remnants,

    fun trying to picture this

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  13. That butterfly is us! When we finally get to our definition, we'll be soaked in sighs. Love the thought.
    Rosie

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  14. Very Nice Poetry with an amazing Imagination
    Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!

    It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!

    Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/

    some of my Haiku Collections
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/creative-challenges/the-haiku-challenge/

    and also, on my very recent Work as well
    https://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/10/03/dilemma/

    !!! Happy Rally !!!
    Cheers !!

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  15. butterflies live a short but beautiful life.great poem

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