Thursday, January 12, 2012

::When Time frowns::


Silver rime
on moments, once sublime
flickering across purple twilight,

Stale promises piled ‘neath a melancholic night.
faceless voices rejoicing an eclipsed moon’s plight

in solitude, a distant dawn drowns
life drapes an old hag’s gown,
when time frowns.



Poetry Form-  The Trois-par-Huit was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.


Trois-par-Huit (Three-by-Eight or Octa-Tri for short), a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3 and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3. The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes the meaning of the poem.  *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned.


Submitting for Thursday Poet's Rally week 60

22 comments:

  1. nice poem

    http://bupinder21.wordpress.com/2012/01/03/r-i-p/

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  2. What a great job on this form (new to me) and a lovely poem...just beautiful.

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  3. Only so many words to express a vision. Wonderfully Written.

    http://mrblaque78.wordpress.com/2012/01/11/discarded-without-hopes/

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  4. when time frowns?
    interesting observations.

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  5. life drapes an old hag gown is really cool

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  6. ‘neath a melancholic night.
    This is a very viseral poem...strikes a cord in me

    http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/01/you-wish-me.html

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  7. Well done. This type of poem is new to me. The title is interesting too.

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  8. Good work there... It is amazing to put words in form of shape, without losing its rhythm and meaning.

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  9. A wonderful write!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/10/the-sun-came-up-again-4/

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  10. so very painfully true. fantastic poem and an amazing trois par huit.

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  11. so much said in so few words!good job!

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  12. when time frowns, oh, love the title,

    vivid imagery.

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  13. Wonderful poem. It's so different in his form.

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  14. Lovely Poetry...The meaning and the rhymes both intact. :) Shall be following you know.

    I got to know about you from The Poetic Palace.
    !Hugs!

    ANSHUL
    http://anshul-gautam.blogspot.com/2012/01/butterfly.html

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  15. Very cool - interesting, entertaining and teaching...great write!

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  16. Always interesting to see new forms, great write :)

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  17. I liked the form and you did well with it...

    Loved the thought - When time frowns... :)

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  18. Not my usual thing at all, but I really like what you did with this; nicely done!

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  19. "Stale promises piled ‘neath a melancholic night" - what a beautiful line!

    here's my offering this week: http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/01/13/friday-the-13th-made-you-look-and-also-dear-homer-drafting/

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