Saturday, April 5, 2014

Essence - Earth

Theme : Poetry Types   
Day 1 - A for Acrostic  
Day 2 - B for Blitz   
Day 3 - C for CinqTroisDecaLaRhyme
Day 4 - D For Diamente

I find poems with internal rhyme tough to write, you need to take care of so many things. Don’t exceed syllable count, don’t force the rhyme, keep the slow smooth, no filler words ... ahhh ... but still what’s better than a good challenge. Here's a dedication to Mother Earth in the form of Essence.


Flora and sandy shores,
Kookaburra adores.

Eucalyptus stands tall
While Platypus enthral

Leo looks down from high
Moonlight surrounds the sky

Frail womb of abandoned land
yester's bloom, sleeps on sand,

spring smothered by concrete,
limp wings, desperately plead,

summer steadily blaze,
dissolving winter's grace.


Kookaburra watching over Pacific Ocean

Essence is a short structured form of two lines. Each line has six syllable, with end rhyme and internal rhyme. 

 

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18 comments:

  1. Beautiful! "spring smothered by concrete" - what an image you have painted here with words. You may find it tough to write this kind of poem, but the result is absolutely great!

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    1. thank you so much Beloo... I am so glad you liked the lines

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  2. Australia nicely captured in an Essence rhyme. Loved it.

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    1. I am glad you felt that way. Thank you :)

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  3. I look down from high? :-o Utna bhi uuncha nahi hoon Raji :P

    jokes aside, it is a very beautiful take on Australia. :)

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    1. hahaha ROFL :D didn't realize it :D
      thank you so much for writing in :)

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  4. Down under captured well and yeah great rhythm'

    PhenoMenon
    http://throodalookingglass.com/2014/04/extraordinary-exciting-experiences/

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  5. your words paint a lovely picture. Beautifully done.

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  6. Wow!! Lovely imagery! You astound me each time!

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  7. This is my fav so far!!! Lovely imagination :)

    Stri

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  8. Loving how you have captured the essence of Australia...makes me feel at home! :)

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  9. Hats off to your imagination, Girl :) Loved it :)

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  10. There is a beauty in that Kookaburra and its placidity, echoed in your post!

    *Shailaja*
    Introspection in Shades of 11
    A to Z Challenge, 2014

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  11. That's a wow post on a Sunday that cast a spell on your readers. Great going, Rajlakshmi:)

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  12. I didn't know there were so many types of poems. I liked the way you worked a Kookaburra in there.
    Nana Prah

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  13. Stopping by on the 6th day of the #challenge, Congratulations on your blog. I'm writing about gardening and related topics if you have time or interest. Come see me.

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