Monday, April 7, 2014

Ghazal - Promises

Theme : Poetry Types   
  Day 1 - A for Acrostic                                        
Day 2 - B for Blitz   
Day 3 - C for CinqTroisDecaLaRhyme                    
Day 4 - D For Diamente 
Day 5 - E for Essence                                       
Day 6 - F for Florette 

 


I have written shayaris in Hindi, but never Ghazal. Having read and listened to some excellent Ghazals in Hindi, I kept wondering if I would justice to this form in English. Well you never know until you try :) so here’s a Ghazal for you.

Promises 

Yester lingers around, whispering promises,
Do I still care about, your fading promises?

Yet beneath moonlit sky, I hum old rusty songs
O my heart can't forget, endearing promises,

Stranded on an island, cosmic ages ago
foolish dreams await your, deceiving promises

under scorching sun, again Shimmi walks alone,
determined to carve her own, smiling promises.

A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that precedes the refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line, has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer to the authors pen-name... The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc. 

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15 comments:

  1. Well this was beautiful. I must admit a first of English ghazal that I've read

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  2. I love Ghazals and love Jagjit Singh. Had such a velvety voice

    PhenoMenon
    http://throodalookingglass.com/2014/04/gymnema-sylvestre/

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  3. Wow.. Just wow!!! :)
    Shalzzz|Loving Life
    Check out my latest at TaleofTwoTomatoes

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  4. English Ghazal I knew it was coming... you have penned it brilliantly <3

    ~S(t)ri
    Participant|AtoZ Challenge 2014
    Smile, it makes (y)our day!

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  5. This is fabulous! Just fabulous! I am a big fan of ghazals, especially Ghalib's. And thanks for introducing me to English ghazals now :) Please keep writing this form!

    Beauty Interprets, Expresses, Manifests the Eternal

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  6. I love Ghazals and Loved your take on it in English...You r talented woman!

    Random Thoughts Naba

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  7. Wow.....lead us to more such beautiful compositions, Raj :)

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  8. Reading my first English Gazal :) nice

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  9. Just WOW !! I never knew a Ghazal could be written in English too...

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  10. Two years ago, I did different types of poetry forms a to z. My ghazal is about a giraffe:
    http://mainelywrite.blogspot.com/2012/04/g-is-for-giraffe.html.

    Donna Smith
    The A-to-Z Challenge
    http://mainelywrite.blogspot.com
    Mainely Write

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  11. This is pure poetry. How magically you walked us through the different kinds of promises!

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  12. I read two Ghazals yesterday and was quite amazed to see this kind of work in English. Youra is fabulously done, complete justice to our genre!! Well done!

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  13. I have heard of the term "ghazal" - but never knew exactly how the form was made up. I appreciate both learning about it as well as the high quality of your poem. Brava!

    Julie Jordan Scott
    The Bold Writer from A to Z

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