Sunday, April 13, 2014

Lanturne - Lovesong

Theme : Poetry Types   
 


This poem is about a girl, waiting for her love, who’s fighting in a war far away. She is asking the wind to remind him, of the promise that he made, that he would return back – alive.



Will
zephyre,
carry my
lovelorn song, to
you?

Would
these notes
muffle sounds
of exploding
shells?

Midst
cries of
fading lives
sooth your aching
soul


And
gently,
remind you
of promises
made?


The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of one, two, three, four, one.

::Don't Miss out on previous poetry types::
Day 1 - A for Acrostic                                        

Day 2 - B for Blitz   
Day 3 - C for CinqTroisDecaLaRhyme                    

Day 4 - D For Diamente  
Day 5 - E for Essence                                       

Day 6 - F for Florette 
Day 7 - G for Ghazal 
Day 8 - H for Haiku 
Day 9 - I for Inverted Refrain  
Day 10 - J for Joseph Star
Day 11 - K for Kyrielle

12 comments:

  1. My heart weeps when I think of our soldiers at war. What a foolish, senseless activity, it is :( You, as usual, have captured the essence so well.

    ~Shailaja's latest A~Z post

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  2. wow wow wow!!!! Heart melt hogaya!!!

    ~S(t)ri
    Participant|AtoZ Challenge 2014
    Smile, it makes (y)our day!

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  3. whoa that sounds like a summary of Zombie.. A popular rock song by the group Cranberries......

    PhenoMenon
    http://throodalookingglass.com/2014/04/lamp-light/

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  4. Very nicely done! The sentiments of the girl are captured quite beautifully. And the form of the poem is very interesting indeed.

    Beauty Interprets, Expresses, Manifests the Eternal

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  5. Another touching poem, a soldier's love cries in the wind. Loved it.

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  7. this is so sad.....and so true....there are countless such women waiting for their loved one, who is fighting a meaningless battle somewhere....i wish there was no war...and just love....lovely lines btw..

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  8. Lovely poem! And I'm so glad to be learning about different forms of poetry. Who knew?

    LuAnn Braley
    AJ's Hooligans @AtoZChallenge
    Back Porchervations

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  9. Lovely lines that are soulful depiction of the pathos !!

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