Tuesday, September 9, 2014

Irrevocable

I linger for a moment more,
and watch you burn me to the soul,
on these frozen shores of yore.

They say I am an irrevocable fool,
obsessed with a notion of love.
I only wonder who is more cruel?

What do they know of the pain that sears,
and this sound of my breaking heart,

Amidst the silence no one  hears.


41 comments:

  1. No brickbats today, I thoroughly enjoyed this!

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  2. Heart-touching especially the last 3 lines, Rajlakshmi.

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  3. One word - Poignant... The ending was the icing on the cake...

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    1. thank you so much Naba... glad you liked it

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  4. What raw power in your words, Raj. I am blown away. Honestly!

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    1. thank you so much for your kind words :)

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  5. So true... love is a dangerous game but love, we must :)

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    1. one can't help falling in love :)
      thanks a lot

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  6. Short, touching and powerful. Obsessed with notion of love- loved it!

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  7. This is like those old Hindi film songs about the parwana and shama...remember? O maybe you are too young to know what I am speaking about :) You describe the beauty of the pain of love very nicely in these lines.

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    1. hahaha yeah I remember the song, it has beautiful lyrics. Thank you so much Beloo

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  8. How true and sad and painful. The moths to a flame goes hand in hand with your poem. Sometimes we loves the bad boys. You are truly eloquent in your words.

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    1. Yeah I seen so many girls falling for bad boys... well love is beyong one's control afterall :) thank you for writing in

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  9. Melancholic yet beautiful! Lovely piece Rajlakshmi :)

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  10. Oh, please believe me, I hear your silence, I too made such a reference. Love and Light, S

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    1. thank you so much :) will check out your poem too

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  11. Love happens, not made.Lovely lines.

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  12. beautiful and quite heartrending. The last three lines are brilliant. #prose4T

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  13. How emotional and powerful..you penned it so well!! It literally made me cry. It was like I could feel each and every word!
    I would always come here, do let me know when you post a new poem!

    Have a great weekend :)
    Charu
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    1. So happy to read your kind words :D thank you so much Charu.

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  14. Heartbreak is no fun, especially when you have to do it alone. You've captured the pain here beautifully. x

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  15. Such powerful words. I love this. Beautifully written. Thank you for linking to Prose for Thought :)

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    1. happy to link Victoria, thank you for stopping by

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