Friday, March 19, 2010

[Thursday Poet's Rally]::Listen to the sighs!!!::

Written for  Jingle's Thursday Poet's Rally

Listen to the Sighs!!!

maimed by cancerous dust
lurking behind a shadow of
incessant greed,blind to howls of nature.
Endangered by our folly, deep gash
bedecks its lovely face,
wilting ageless

mellowed voices,
buried by grinding teeth
of metallic saws, beheading
glorious elements of graceful life,
clawed by selfish desires, still
with every dying hope
whimpering sighs

Form :: Rictameter
Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain. Starting your first line with a two syllable word, you then consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two. i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 Then down again, 8, 6, 4, 2 Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.

Image source : google


  1. very nice...I have written some align it and you get a beauty!

  2. Beautiful pic. :)
    I enjoyed reading this post! :)
    Nice one! :)

  3. it is so exciting to get on the wagon of your talents and poetry!
    Happy Thursday!

  4. To make sure you get more feedback from poets, I suggest that you visit 6 poets who are participants, 6 poets from fresh poets links...
    have fun!
    Good Luck!

  5. @Nalini
    thanks a lot :)
    will do it :)

    thank you so much :D

  6. @Jingle

    Yes Jingle I have already visited some :)
    thanks a lot :)

  7. hey this was so nice..the imagery is good and well presented :)

    love love xxx,
    ayu :3

    visit my blog if you have time ^_^

  8. awesome... i was always awed by the rictameter.. though i havent given my hand at it yet.. your poem gives me a new surge to give it a try.. i shall surely try it soon :D

    Here from Jingle's rally..
    u can check my poem here

  9. Welcome to the group and nice work I look forward to checking out more of your work in the future

  10. excellent ...!!!really puts the point across really well..without losing the gravity of the situation..

  11. WOW I am impressed this was really well created, how clever..brilliant rally piece :)

  12. Very nice poem. I love the title of your blog as well. Can't wait to read more!

  13. Great piece. And that pic is absolutely gorgeous. Your blog looks lovely.


  14. Nice you took my imagination to a whole new level

  15. And the beauty shall survive, eventually.

  16. It is always nice to experiment with more forms of poem writing. It simply gives you options apart from giving great structure to your poems.

    The message here is very clear and you have chosen a very graphic image that goes well with the poem. Humankind is awakening to this truth. A bit late, but not too late. Things can be rectified, but it needs quick action. I hope more artistically inclined people such as yourself can write more wonderful pieces like this to motivate people to be part of the action and save the beauty.

    Have a nice Sunday. Cheers!

  17. Deep poem..
    Interesting Form..
    Beautiful photo..
    Well done :)

  18. thank you everyone for such wonderful and encouraging comments

  19. wow. nicely written and wonderful form...

  20. Extraordinary ability to write to meter without losing the beauty of language.


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