Thursday, February 11, 2016

Pristine Melancholia

Hello there!!
This blog has been lying dead since November. My muse ran away so I had no idea what to write about, but a discussion about poems in the morning sparked my good old love for formed poetry. Thanks Geetika :D So after hours of writing and re-writing and searching for proper rhyming words ... it's ready (You might think  - Is that all you got!!) 

Tadaaa... my first poem of 2016 - a form called Pantoum. 

Wrapped in pristine melancholia,
she awaits the end of time,
whispering ‘neath a lone Acacia,
long forgotten vanilla rhyme.

She awaits the end of time,
an apparition of once a bride,
long forgotten vanilla rhyme 
soars above the ebb of tide.

An apparition of once a bride
for a thousand years and more,
soars above the ebb of tide,
they say awaiting a man of yore.

For a thousand years and more
whispering ‘neath a lone Acacia,
they say awaiting a man of yore,
wrapped in pristine melancholia.

photo by Caroline Knopf

Pantoum Poetry Form

The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

Source:  Shadow Poetry


  1. My goodness.. Now that's quite a poetry.. You're saying hours and hours, I would take full day to write something like this. And mind you, you should write poem often, coz you do a fantastic job :)
    Thanks for the mention Raj..
    I think I ll pick you as my muse and give it another shot :)


  2. Jabardasssstttt!!!!👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
    Massstttt likhi ekdum...
    I wonder when my muse will return!🙈

  3. Brilliant, Raj! Where are you learning these different kinds of poetry forms from? And from where are you learning to write this beautifully? Superb!

  4. This is really beautiful. So full of longing and me anyway

  5. I read that thrice! Thank you Rajlakshmi!

  6. This is a form I always enjoy reading.


  7. That was a very enjoyable read - great poem - very in to poems myself these days, so looooved it sweetie:-)


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